Blue Tuesday, and Sarah asks us to write a blue poem. Submitted to dVerse, May 11, 2021
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BLUE EYES
Blue eyes....he had blue eyes
he was a daydreamer, a night schemer
a song at dawn
a risk taker, a deal breaker
here and gone
sweet talking, slow walking
midnight kiss
skip to my lou, digideroo
introduction to bliss
a sip from the horn of plenty
left me in a flood of tears
Blue eyes
he had blue eyes
I can only imagine the attraction... maybe you need blue eyes yourself to be fooled though.
ReplyDeleteI love this song of blues:
ReplyDelete'free from innate supernatural abilities,
steeped in her blues, though they never shine bright.'
The internal rhymes and the half-rhymes really set this poem singing. He sounds like a devil with blue eyes!
Your poem reminded me of that old Elton John song, Bev! I love the internal rhymes, especially ‘daydreamer/night schemer’ and ‘sweet talking, slow walking’. I sensed a sad ending.
ReplyDeletehttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4CiyKeSnSxk
And if they're not blue, they're brown, or green...
ReplyDeleteThese lines
ReplyDelete"midnight kiss
skip to my lou,
digideroo
introduction to bliss"
I love the pace of them; the sound of them.
and then the sadness in the repetition within those final two lines.
Made me sigh aloud.
Oh yeah, the structure here is perfect for the hypnotic hold Ol' Blue Eyes clearly has on you. Great work, Beverly.
ReplyDeleteWell done weaving these images. I love the digidero, a nice rare image that pairs well with these haunting eyes.
ReplyDeletemy light blue eyes thank you for the mention. but i cannot play the digidero to acompany such a well written poem.
ReplyDeleteYes, those blue eyes....nice poem!
ReplyDeleteEyes can mesmerize...
ReplyDeleteSo did mine. All of it.
ReplyDeleteOh, for some reason, I love that line, "Skip to my lou, didgeridoo." Sad poem, but the rhythm seems fun and almost cheerful, just like some sad songs can have an upbeat sound.
ReplyDeleteWith distinctive eyes like this, I'm not surprised they would leave this impression. As blue as my eyes are, I hope I'm not guilty of any of this.
ReplyDeletemaybe just the slow-walking slow-talking part, Ken!
DeleteWould make a great country song! You always bring the rhythm!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem Beverly. You have to watch those blue eyed love her and leave hers!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the rhyme scheme - it has a lyrical flow.
ReplyDeletebewitching ~
ReplyDeleteO de blue eyes -- "a sip from the horn of plenty / left me in a flood of tears" is the sea of it.
ReplyDeleteExcellent!!!
ReplyDeleteReminds me of the song Blue Eyes Crying in the Rain. Very effective with the short lines.
ReplyDeleteSad ending after so much to hope for. Very well expressed.
ReplyDeleteSad ending after so much to hope for. Very well expressed.
ReplyDeleteDon't they always have blue eyes! Blue jeans too :-D
ReplyDeleteBlue blues
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