Thursday, October 21, 2021

PASSION'S NOT FOREVER

THURSDAY POETICS, and the challenge is to write a compound word poem with set rhyme and meter given as aab and 883 in each of 5 3-line stanzas.  Submitted to dVerse October 21, 2021.
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PASSION'S NOT FOREVER

Our encounter was meant to be
though likely we did not foresee
it coming.

In spite of the stormy forecast
we felt certain it would last
a long time.

Cluelessly we chose to forego
troubles that continued to show
us red flags

Enjoying passionate foreplay
we continued to seize the day
and savor it

'Til something we could not foretell
ended in our passion's death knell
it's all done.


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15 comments:

  1. GraceOctober 21, 2021 at 2:26 PM

    A death knell when all is done, sadly.

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  2. robkistnerOctober 21, 2021 at 2:33 PM

    It is sad, but it is also true — nothing lasts forever Bn

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  3. calmkateOctober 21, 2021 at 4:39 PM

    I really like the build up, the crescendo and then the bang ... how most relationships end. Well done!

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  4. DoraOctober 21, 2021 at 7:05 PM

    Loved how you structured the fall, Beverly, inevitable given the "red flags."
    pax,
    dora

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  5. IngridOctober 21, 2021 at 8:11 PM

    Some passions whirl in like that and then burn out just as suddenly! Nicely evoked.

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  6. Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost October 22, 2021 at 8:06 AM

    Been there done that. Too many times. That's why I don't play the game anymore.
    An impressive poem. It told a tale that I think many of us are familiar with.

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  7. paeansunpluggedOctober 22, 2021 at 9:09 AM

    Ah! Doomed from the beginning. But the end of a relationship is always sad.

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  8. HelenOctober 22, 2021 at 9:37 AM

    I feel quite content being 80 and absent from all that drama!

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  9. Merril D. SmithOctober 22, 2021 at 12:05 PM

    It's sad that their passion ended, and seemed to simply fade away.
    (I didn't see the compound word? )

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    1. indybevOctober 22, 2021 at 12:17 PM

      I mistakenly put my compound word in the 883 instead of at the end. (foresee, forego, forecast, foretell, foreplay)

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  10. Mary HoodOctober 22, 2021 at 1:41 PM

    So often we don't recognize the red flags. Beautiful poem, (-no matter the rhymescheme) I messed up mine.

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  11. KerfeOctober 22, 2021 at 2:15 PM

    Sometimes it takes awhile for our conscious mind to catch up to intuition's warnings.

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  12. Gillena CoxOctober 22, 2021 at 4:47 PM

    Nice write, i see you spruced up the form a bit

    Much💜love

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    1. indybevOctober 23, 2021 at 7:41 AM

      Purely unintentional! I was halfway through my comments before I realized I put my compound words in the wrong place! Mea culpa.

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  13. brudbergOctober 24, 2021 at 7:10 AM

    Indeed, in the end we can only meet that knell.

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