Thursday, June 8, 2017

DOUBLE LAI

Victoria is hostess this week at
Meet the Bar, and challenges us
to write a lai ... aab with first two
lines 5 syllables, last line two syllables,
and 3 stanzas.   Two came to mind ....
Submitted to dVerse Meet the Bar
June 8, 2017
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George was a farmer
A well-known charmer
Plenty rich

May was a looker
Hard-working hooker
Greedy bitch

Both perceived their catch
A natural match
For which?
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A lady was Mabel
Seemed to be able
Fred  thought

She revealed on their dates
She’d all the good traits
He sought

And so they were wed
A bad day for Fred
He’s caught
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20 comments:

  1. This reminds me of Edgar Lee Masters 'Spoon River Anthology' So clever!

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  2. Perfection--kicked booty on the prompt--you seem made for this form, & like me you did two of them; which I dig. You made it look effortless; nice work.

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  3. So fun, Beverly. I agree with Glenn--this form is yours! You aced the meter, it was humorous and you doubled the fun. Thank you.

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  4. These are sad, sad stories! Lots of fun. :)

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  5. Two tales of romance. I like Fred. The perect woman, made to order

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  6. Ha! So fun! Like a limerick but not so dirty.

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  7. This was such fun to read. I found myself chuckling.

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  8. love the fun in this... limericky

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  9. O my! That was fun Bev. You always ace the rhymes. I simply have to love them.

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  10. So very well done! Chuckling I am...love them both! You really had fun with the form :)

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  11. Yes...a delight to read on this cloudy morn.;)

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  12. Both got caught, smiles ~ Love the two tales Bev ~

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  13. ๐Ÿ˜ฑ๐Ÿ˜ you had me laughing hard.

    -imelda

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  14. That second stanza made me laugh :)

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  15. Always love the humor in your poems.

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