Thursday, September 14, 2017

AUTUMN VIGNETTES

It's Meeting the Bar, and Bjorn requests
metaphors, avoiding the use of "like" and
"as", avoiding similes.
Submitted to d'Verse
September 14, 2017



It was a write it on your heart kind of autumn day.
Snowy clouds skittered across topaz skies, white-
petticoated ladies on their way to some grand soiree.
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Bare trees kiss the autumn sky, old ladies with arms
akimbo, their skirts jeweled pools of fallen leaves at their feet.
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Distant vees of geese arrowing south,  their honking
splitting the crisp autumn air with news of their departure.

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(Photo Credit: Pinterest)
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15 comments:

  1. tonispencerSeptember 14, 2017 at 4:42 PM

    Such lovely snippets of that "write in your heart kind of day". Wonderful!

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  2. CedarwindSeptember 14, 2017 at 6:31 PM

    Nicely crafted vignettes Beverly---a pleasure to read.

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  3. NosaintSeptember 14, 2017 at 6:43 PM

    This line right here really got me: "old ladies with arms
    akimbo, standing amidst jeweled pools of fallen leaves." I can see that so clearly, and a pretty metaphor, to boot.

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  4. brudbergSeptember 14, 2017 at 9:40 PM

    I love the image of clouds as ladies and how they age with fall. Great

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  5. sarahSeptember 14, 2017 at 10:58 PM

    Oh, perfect. Such amazing images, each one so clear.

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  6. Kim M. RussellSeptember 14, 2017 at 11:13 PM

    Love you 'write it on your heart kind of autumn day,' Bev.

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  7. AmayaSeptember 15, 2017 at 2:53 AM

    The cloud metaphor! Isn't it awesome to see the crisp autumn sky bringing out the best in our imaginations?

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  8. Paul John DearSeptember 15, 2017 at 4:56 AM

    Ahh nature's ladies on display again and those honkers in flight...so perfectly painted Bev.

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  9. Frank HubenySeptember 15, 2017 at 7:42 AM

    I liked the "vees of geese" and their honking viewed as "news".

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  10. SreejaSeptember 16, 2017 at 2:57 AM

    Oh wow beautifully wrote....loved the image that came to mind...delightful!!

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  11. Alison HSeptember 16, 2017 at 5:14 AM

    It sound like there have been some delicious autumn days out there. XX

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  12. qbitSeptember 16, 2017 at 5:38 AM

    "Write it on your heart Kevin nd of Autumn day" - perfect.

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  13. Mary HoodSeptember 16, 2017 at 8:52 AM

    I love this! Anything to do with clouds. Their metaphirs keep changing as they do. Beautiful imagery!

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  14. lillianthehomepoet.wordpress.comSeptember 18, 2017 at 11:58 AM

    Late to the reading...the clock has not quite struck three to turn it into Monday haibun so here I am still reading metaphors! So glad I read this one....
    wonderful snippets indeed! Especially love the first two...white petticoated ladies and then jeweled skirts. LOVELY use of metaphors for the season. :)

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  15. ImeldaSeptember 18, 2017 at 8:58 PM

    I like the autumn images you evoked in your poems.💙

    -imelda

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