Thursday, September 14, 2017

AUTUMN VIGNETTES

It's Meeting the Bar, and Bjorn requests
metaphors, avoiding the use of "like" and
"as", avoiding similes.
Submitted to d'Verse
September 14, 2017



It was a write it on your heart kind of autumn day.
Snowy clouds skittered across topaz skies, white-
petticoated ladies on their way to some grand soiree.
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Bare trees kiss the autumn sky, old ladies with arms
akimbo, their skirts jeweled pools of fallen leaves at their feet.
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Distant vees of geese arrowing south,  their honking
splitting the crisp autumn air with news of their departure.

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(Photo Credit: Pinterest)

15 comments:

  1. Such lovely snippets of that "write in your heart kind of day". Wonderful!

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  2. Nicely crafted vignettes Beverly---a pleasure to read.

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  3. This line right here really got me: "old ladies with arms
    akimbo, standing amidst jeweled pools of fallen leaves." I can see that so clearly, and a pretty metaphor, to boot.

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  4. I love the image of clouds as ladies and how they age with fall. Great

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  5. Oh, perfect. Such amazing images, each one so clear.

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  6. Love you 'write it on your heart kind of autumn day,' Bev.

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  7. The cloud metaphor! Isn't it awesome to see the crisp autumn sky bringing out the best in our imaginations?

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  8. Ahh nature's ladies on display again and those honkers in flight...so perfectly painted Bev.

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  9. I liked the "vees of geese" and their honking viewed as "news".

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  10. Oh wow beautifully wrote....loved the image that came to mind...delightful!!

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  11. It sound like there have been some delicious autumn days out there. XX

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  12. "Write it on your heart Kevin nd of Autumn day" - perfect.

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  13. I love this! Anything to do with clouds. Their metaphirs keep changing as they do. Beautiful imagery!

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  14. Late to the reading...the clock has not quite struck three to turn it into Monday haibun so here I am still reading metaphors! So glad I read this one....
    wonderful snippets indeed! Especially love the first two...white petticoated ladies and then jeweled skirts. LOVELY use of metaphors for the season. :)

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  15. I like the autumn images you evoked in your poems.💙

    -imelda

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