Monday, May 8, 2017

ECHO

Quadrille #32  requires exactly 44 words
using the word echo
Submitted to dVerse
May 8, 2017


Abandoned and forlorn
Secrets kept within
Children’s voices echo
And play remember when

Someone’s cherished home
In days of long ago
Their voices speak to me
In echoes soft and low.

Simple days passed
Dreams were dreamed
Their memories remained
Or so it seemed.
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15 comments:

  1. I love the rhythm of this, I can sense the heartbeats of those children... I hope they remained.

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  2. What a wonderful tribute to an abandoned house and the memories it must hold.

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  3. Such wonderful rhythmic flow in this one, Beverly ❤️

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  4. Wonderful quadrille and I loved the feeling here. You get extra points for writing verse.

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  5. Places do indeed hold memories and you have captured that delightfully and mysteriously :)

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  6. This is liquid, Beverly! It flows wonderfully!

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  7. It does flow so smoothly--it is soothing to return our thoughts to memories of more innocent times. Lovely.

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  8. I liked the idea of children's voices echoing in memory in that old home.

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  9. Yes, your message is clarion, as the haunting echo of children's laughter is only slightly colored by a faint scream at the end of the beat; the internal rhymes, leaping unfettered are more free than form; I dig it.

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  10. I can imagine those voices echoing in the walls and rooms of the cherished home Bev ~ Good one ~

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  11. my heart feels so much for this, I know the loss of a happy home, Beverly I wish I could give you a hug for the emotions you stir in me.

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  12. Oh this tugs at the heartstrings. Well done. :)

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  13. Houses do retain memories, I'm sure of it. Lovely words.

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  14. It's so interesting to me how houses can absorb the essence of lives that have lived within...you really can almost hear echoes of children's laughter. Beautiful, Beverly.

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