Frank has challenged us to write a poem
in a form called Ottava rima.
Ottava rima is an old Italian form consisting of
multiple stanzas each of eight lines using
iambic meter and having the rhyme
pattern abababcc.
Submitted to dVerse May, 2017
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She left in disarray, thoughts scattered
With only vestiges of broken dreams
Betrayed, abused, emotions tattered
She’d lost herself, a victim of his schemes
Escape and freedom all that mattered
She fled with faith alone, or so it seems.
She vowed to find a safe and better place
For regaining strength and renewal of grace.
Slowly they returned, the things she treasured
Things she scarcely realized she’d lost
Confidence, identity, resolve unmeasured
She came to know how great had been the cost
When she had lived only to see him pleasured
And he, in turn, had cruelly double-crossed.
She put in the past the deceit and degradation
And faced her future, filled with celebration.
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Take the leap of faith
Find yourself victorious
Stronger than you know
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Good on you, Bev; creating two strong stanzas, capped with a delicious senryu. Very stylish, rocking the prompt & telling a complete tale s so few brilliant lines; smile.
ReplyDeleteIt looked like the poem was going end on a depressive note, but you managed to get the expected celebration promised in the title in after all. I liked the haiku at the end.
ReplyDeleteProbably not well titled, Frank. I was a bit puzzled as to a proper one.
DeleteOh I do like the coming out from betrayal being stronger... that is as it should be, and I hope it happens often.
ReplyDeleteThe rhyming is so well blended - beautiful flow to this poem!
ReplyDeleteA strong ottava rima, Bev, which began so sadly, with the images of broken dreams and tattered emotions. But the turning point shone through with the vow to 'find a safe and better place / For regaining strength and renewal of grace'.
ReplyDeleteThe second stanza reminded me of a film of a house collapsing in reverse, being restored: 'Things she scarcely realized she’d lost / Confidence, identity, resolve unmeasured'. The senryu is so encouraging!
A beatiful poem! So inspiring!!
ReplyDeleteA dilemma poem that resolves nicely. Engaging. Brings questions to the reader's mind. And that's always okay! Good writing!
ReplyDeleteEntering a new period in one's life after parting from a dubious person of the opposite sex is a glorious feeling. Off with the old,
ReplyDeletein with the new. For some, it happens several times!
She put in the past the deceit and degradation
ReplyDeleteAnd faced her future, filled with celebration
That should be the attitude. One is to forgive for whatever adverse happenings in the past. The future offers more rewards for those who do. It works that way apparently. Great write Beverly, wonderful haiku too!
Hank
Beautifully realised.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! Betrayal and passion do not have to be the final notes!
ReplyDeleteThat was supposed to be 'pain' instead of 'passion'
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