using the word echo
Submitted to dVerse
May 8, 2017
Abandoned and forlorn
Secrets kept within
Children’s voices echo
And play remember when
Someone’s cherished home
In days of long ago
Their voices speak to me
In echoes soft and low.
Simple days passed
Dreams were dreamed
Their memories remained
Or so it seemed.
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This is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI love the rhythm of this, I can sense the heartbeats of those children... I hope they remained.
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful tribute to an abandoned house and the memories it must hold.
ReplyDeleteSuch wonderful rhythmic flow in this one, Beverly ❤️
ReplyDeleteWonderful quadrille and I loved the feeling here. You get extra points for writing verse.
ReplyDeletePlaces do indeed hold memories and you have captured that delightfully and mysteriously :)
ReplyDeleteThis is liquid, Beverly! It flows wonderfully!
ReplyDeleteIt does flow so smoothly--it is soothing to return our thoughts to memories of more innocent times. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteI liked the idea of children's voices echoing in memory in that old home.
ReplyDeleteYes, your message is clarion, as the haunting echo of children's laughter is only slightly colored by a faint scream at the end of the beat; the internal rhymes, leaping unfettered are more free than form; I dig it.
ReplyDeleteI can imagine those voices echoing in the walls and rooms of the cherished home Bev ~ Good one ~
ReplyDeletemy heart feels so much for this, I know the loss of a happy home, Beverly I wish I could give you a hug for the emotions you stir in me.
ReplyDeleteOh this tugs at the heartstrings. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteHouses do retain memories, I'm sure of it. Lovely words.
ReplyDeleteIt's so interesting to me how houses can absorb the essence of lives that have lived within...you really can almost hear echoes of children's laughter. Beautiful, Beverly.
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